"Jill's Awakening" by brake pedal aka bill ayers

[Urban Hillbilly]

i too bought and read your book Bill. id saw one of your posts about a book youd read on a forum, and said wtf? looked at lulu.com, and ordered it. MONEY WELL SPENT!!! awesome book!! great read!! and to be honest i WANT a frickin sequel IN PRINT!!

really, i WILL PAY to get the sequel, i think your story is that good!! youve alot of talent, and i sincerly hope you pursue your writing.

for what its worth,
Urban Hillbilly

p.s. any chance of an autographed copy?

p.p.s. im GLAD you posted about your book, even as if youd read it, had you not, id have NEVER known about it, and would have missed a great read!

[Hammer]

What happened to Jeanna and Gracie from Chapter 2? I thought they would come back in at some point. Why even talk about them?

Hammer

[brake pedal]

thanks for your comments UH, i tried to PM you. but thank you for taking the time to read my work and to let me know how you liked it.


Hammer: i put that section in as well as other sections, such as when "Dwike" tells of his experiences during the fall to broaden the scope of the story. i felt that consentrating to heavily on the main characters would grow tiresome. the same with "Jim Tompkins" relating his experience during the war.

actually after writting the "Jeanna" section i was intrigued with her character and her story. i think it would make for a great spin-off story. Maybe someday i will have the time to continue my writting, it is something i enjoy.

[Ebb]

brake pedal you arent going to leave Jill with a knife to her throat are you? That just wouldnt be right. Ebb

[larry_minn]

Just found this story in my favorites that I bookmarked a couple yrs ago. The poor gal is NAKED with a crazy man who has a knife to her.
We need to know more. Does she get dressed?

[Randy in Arizona]

Poor Jill is in a even worse spot than Sweet Sue!

I plopped down in my easy chair and turned on Channel 2
A bad gunslinger called Salty Sam was chasin' poor Sweet Sue
He trapped her in the old sawmill and said with an evil laugh,
"If you don't give me the deed to your ranch
I'll saw you all in half!"
And then he grabbed her (and then)
He tied her up (and then)
He turned on the bandsaw (and then, and then...!)

(chorus):
And then along came Jones
Tall thin Jones
Slow-walkin' Jones
Slow-talkin' Jones
Along came long, lean, lanky Jones

Commercial came on, so I got up to get myself a snack
You should've seen what was goin' on by the time that I got back
Down in the old abandoned mine, Sweet Sue was havin' fits
That villain said, "Give me the deed to your ranch
Or I'll blow you all to bits!"
And then he grabbed her (and then)
He tied her up (and then)
He lit the fuse to the dynamite (and then, and then...!)

(chorus)

I got so bugged I turned it off and turned on another show
But there was the same old shoot-'em-up and the same old rodeo
Salty Sam was tryin' to stuff Sweet Sue in a burlap sack
He said, "If you don't give me the deed to your ranch
I'm gonna throw you on the railroad tracks!"
And then he grabbed her (and then)
He tied her up (and then)
He threw her on the railroad tracks (and then)
A train started comin' (and then, and then...!)

(chorus)

Along Came Jones by RAY STEVENS

I hope I am not But I keep hoping the story will get finished.

[kittyluvr]

Brake Pedal, Thank you for sharing your story.